Upload Your Mind :: Download My Soul
Camellia
Source:
Heart Of Android
Tags:
Dubstep, Electronic, Future Bass, Melodic, Chord Jacks, Speed Jacks, Chordjack, CJ
BPM:
166
Length:
4:34
Passes/Fails:
304 / 2423
This LN should be moved to 21080 for sync
woops there's a mean shield i missed
i think you could also move this gap to 1 or 2 to make it smoother 212555|3,212645|3
it almost looks like there are missing notes here because it doesn't follow the same logic as these flam-like bits just moments before it 76109|2,76154|3,76290|3,76335|2,76471|4,76516|1,76651|2,76696|3. i'd suggest repeating the flam-like pattern here 78910|2,78910|4,78910|1,79001|3,79181|4,79272|3,79272|2,79272|1,79362|1,79452|3,79452|4,79543|2,79543|1 but it looks like you meant to and forgot along the way
you do the same thing here 249603|3,249784|2,249965|1,250145|4. it feels too underlayered
sorry, i didn't notice this on the first check
the synth sounds you're mapping here 18730|2,18820|3 are missnapped and should be on 1/3 (so starting a bit earlier). it happens on several LNs in sections with this type of synth
examples
20898|1,20989|4
24422|3,24513|2 (and it also seems like 24513|2 is a ghost note)
26772|3
28127|2
30296|3,30386|2
and so on.. i think you get the point. please go over the entire sections spanning from 17465 to 37706
this also includes 144693 to 164934 although the sections seem slightly different in snaps (maybe production differences), so i wouldn't advice copy pasting these two parts if you were planning to
tl;dr recheck snaps in the sections closely
ghost notes
overlapping note
missed a kick
and here 270883|2
also here 271245|3
ghost note
also here 268805|1,268805|2
and here 270702|3,270702|4
here too 271516|2,271516|1
after fixing this you could also mirror this 271561|3,271561|4,271606|2,271606|1,271651|3,271651|4,271696|2,271696|1,271742|3,271742|4,271787|2,271787|1,271832|4,271832|3,271877|2,271877|1,271922|3,271922|4
i see what you're trying to do with varying the layering for the kick variances, but it doesn't work too well in practice. i'd suggest doing pattern changes instead of making one variation single notes because it feels incoherent
while you're at it, these patterns feel really bland and especially when repeated 263428|3,263428|4,263474|1,263474|2,263519|3,263519|4,263609|4,263609|3,263699|4,263699|3,263790|3,263790|4,263880|3,263880|4
you could the layering for 1/8 sounds so there are some single notes, and then do some more varied chordjacks for the 1/4 kicks to make the part a lot more intereseting
this shield feels uncalled for, would suggest just extending the LN and ending it in a [123] hand
from here 231440 to here 234242 you could really come up with some more creative patterning for this, it feels really out of place considering the rest of the map
removing this jump would create some cool sectioning that brings more tension onto 225657|4,225657|3,225657|1,225657|2 where a new section starts in the music. completely optional though
I like this idea
there's a sound here. might as well try to accent it and lightening the layering around it since you've been focusing on these faster snaps in other parts
the inverse gaps from here 166109 to here 167465 feel pretty arbitrary and i'm not sure what they're supposed to go to
Added some ✨ Jazziness ✨
this part is incredibly awkward and spiky. would definitely recommend restructuring it so it's not a really awkward trill transition into an awkward chordjack pattern
missed a sound here while you accented it here 83202|3,83202|4
missing a note for the drums here. you could remove the LN on 2 and place a note on 2 at 45748
could also place a note on 2 here 46019 since there's a notable sound, but this one is up to you
same goes for this part 172977