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Created by: Akiwi
Submitted: over 3 years ago
Ranked: over 2 years ago
Source: Heart Of Android
Tags:
Dubstep, Electronic, Future Bass, Melodic, Chord Jacks, Speed Jacks, Chordjack, CJ
BPM: 166
Length: 4:34
Passes/Fails: 296 / 2408

[4K] 35.40 - Truly :: Divine

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2nil
User
over 2 years ago

This LN should be moved to 21080 for sync

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

woops there's a mean shield i missed


Jole
User
about 3 years ago

i think you could also move this gap to 1 or 2 to make it smoother 212555|3,212645|3

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

it almost looks like there are missing notes here because it doesn't follow the same logic as these flam-like bits just moments before it 76109|2,76154|3,76290|3,76335|2,76471|4,76516|1,76651|2,76696|3. i'd suggest repeating the flam-like pattern here 78910|2,78910|4,78910|1,79001|3,79181|4,79272|3,79272|2,79272|1,79362|1,79452|3,79452|4,79543|2,79543|1 but it looks like you meant to and forgot along the way


Jole
User
about 3 years ago

you do the same thing here 249603|3,249784|2,249965|1,250145|4. it feels too underlayered

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

sorry, i didn't notice this on the first check

the synth sounds you're mapping here 18730|2,18820|3 are missnapped and should be on 1/3 (so starting a bit earlier). it happens on several LNs in sections with this type of synth

examples

20898|1,20989|4

24422|3,24513|2 (and it also seems like 24513|2 is a ghost note)

26772|3

28127|2

30296|3,30386|2

and so on.. i think you get the point. please go over the entire sections spanning from 17465 to 37706

this also includes 144693 to 164934 although the sections seem slightly different in snaps (maybe production differences), so i wouldn't advice copy pasting these two parts if you were planning to

tl;dr recheck snaps in the sections closely

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

ghost notes

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Issue
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

overlapping note

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Issue
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

missed a kick


Jole
User
about 3 years ago

and here 270883|2

Jole
User
about 3 years ago

also here 271245|3

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

ghost note


Jole
User
about 3 years ago

also here 268805|1,268805|2

Jole
User
about 3 years ago
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Issue
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

i see what you're trying to do with varying the layering for the kick variances, but it doesn't work too well in practice. i'd suggest doing pattern changes instead of making one variation single notes because it feels incoherent


Jole
User
about 3 years ago

while you're at it, these patterns feel really bland and especially when repeated 263428|3,263428|4,263474|1,263474|2,263519|3,263519|4,263609|4,263609|3,263699|4,263699|3,263790|3,263790|4,263880|3,263880|4

you could the layering for 1/8 sounds so there are some single notes, and then do some more varied chordjacks for the 1/4 kicks to make the part a lot more intereseting

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

this shield feels uncalled for, would suggest just extending the LN and ending it in a [123] hand

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Issue
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

from here 231440 to here 234242 you could really come up with some more creative patterning for this, it feels really out of place considering the rest of the map

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Suggestion
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

removing this jump would create some cool sectioning that brings more tension onto 225657|4,225657|3,225657|1,225657|2 where a new section starts in the music. completely optional though


ERA Akiri
Creator
about 3 years ago

I like this idea

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

there's a sound here. might as well try to accent it and lightening the layering around it since you've been focusing on these faster snaps in other parts

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Issue
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

the inverse gaps from here 166109 to here 167465 feel pretty arbitrary and i'm not sure what they're supposed to go to


ERA Akiri
Creator
about 3 years ago

Added some ✨ Jazziness ✨

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Jole
User
about 3 years ago

missed a sound here while you accented it here 83202|3,83202|4

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Issue
Jole
User
about 3 years ago

missing a note for the drums here. you could remove the LN on 2 and place a note on 2 at 45748

could also place a note on 2 here 46019 since there's a notable sound, but this one is up to you


Jole
User
about 3 years ago

same goes for this part 172977