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nitpick; can make a minijack using notes on 205228 and 205328

compared to 24028, this is much much quieter, in fact i never heard this until i see this pattern of yours.

personally would simplify the patterning, using a 3/4 LN and one normal note at 165128

i get what you're representing, but 162828|1,163478|2 this plays really really terribly i swear, like why are you forcing a 1/8 release-then-hit, in one hand, and in two different columns.

switch the lanes of them and problem solved, i.e. 163428|4 to col2, 163478|2 to col4

quite sure there is a missing doube

52428 to 53828 - it's nice that you decrease the snaps (for an obvious reason), however, the transition overall is still unnatural imo, especially at 53228.

how about making 52428 a double. starting from 52761, five 5/36 notes, a 6/36 note, a 7/36, two 8/36, two 1/3 (sorry for the x/36 snapping usage but there's not much ways making this natural without pushing to non-default snaps)

49628 to 50428 - can you at least make 43228 to 44028 similar, the similarity is very obvious and such a difference in patterning is confusing af. how about https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/794500988744368169/1026118504858005514/unknown.png

this is better being a grain of rice, right now this LN has a really direct relation to 49628|1 while musicial wise there's nothing suggesting that

idk what you're representing, but the "aa (or whatever it is)" sound is more prominent here, so start the LN here makes more sense i think

(additionally, a small growl can be heard at 46128, but i doubt this is what you're using the LN for)

should have sth like 42428|1,42428|2 here cuz the same synth can be heard

to do this, shorten 42028|4 to 42128, replace 42328|3,42328|4 with the suggestion above