layering everything here as random jumps is nonsense, i can tell you're placing jumps for vocal syllables as well as the percussion but it plays like nonsense
i would suggest using one handed/closed jumps for percussion aka [12][23][34] and then open [13][14][24] for vocals? anything to make it more clear cut would be good
yeah i agree that the layering was a bit shit. i didnt really like your suggestion though since that made it play really repetitively. i did change it up so it should be better now
some sort of repeating pattern here would work better with the guitar. same with 144534 ascending pr sorta and 151079 descending. 153261 this one especially i think could do with a rework
the single notes to bridge flow gaps(?) really weaken the song representation with those quads there's a clear intent for a break here and i don't think it's very good to play in comparison to without the single notes through the whole section. try it and tell me what you think
this hand starts too early for the vocal phrase and the anchoring impact on 2nd column is reduced by it i would reduce the density as well as it doesn't match the intensity of the others do the same with the repetition of this
layering everything here as random jumps is nonsense, i can tell you're placing jumps for vocal syllables as well as the percussion but it plays like nonsense
i would suggest using one handed/closed jumps for percussion aka [12][23][34] and then open [13][14][24] for vocals? anything to make it more clear cut would be good
yeah i agree that the layering was a bit shit. i didnt really like your suggestion though since that made it play really repetitively. i did change it up so it should be better now
why is there nothing significant going on here in comparison to the other guitar sections this seems very prominent except you do nothing to show it
anchors go brr
some sort of repeating pattern here would work better with the guitar. same with 144534 ascending pr sorta and 151079 descending. 153261 this one especially i think could do with a rework
alright. cooked something up
the single notes to bridge flow gaps(?) really weaken the song representation with those quads there's a clear intent for a break here and i don't think it's very good to play in comparison to without the single notes through the whole section. try it and tell me what you think
this applies to every other section like this in the song, as well
yeah original idea was to increase the flow but i can see where you're coming from. ill remove them
this hand starts too early for the vocal phrase and the anchoring impact on 2nd column is reduced by it i would reduce the density as well as it doesn't match the intensity of the others do the same with the repetition of this
changed it to a jump on [14]